Maxulus "Max"

Maxulus

Gender: Stallion
Species: Unicorn
Mane: Black with navy blue stripes.
Tail: Black with navy blue in the center.
Eyes: Silver
Body: Dark Orange.
Cutie Mark: Piano Keys with drum sticks crossing behind them.
Age (Baby,adult): Adult
Personality: Max is always there for you and is willing to help you in your time of need he is kind, loving and willing to fight for you if he had to. He is serious most of the time but other time's can be completely random. He likes adventuring and exploring making him very brave. His heart is made of iron ever since the heart break and even if you try you can't break him.
Likes: Piano,Drums,Singing,Art,Friends,Kindness,Books,Guitar.
Dislikes: Bullies,Being Laughed At And Not With,Tables,Masks.
History: Maxulus has a great cheerful life, he had a loving caring family three brothers, a sister and a loving and caring mom and dad. His mom and dad got divorced when he was three. Soon after his dad found new love though Max wasn't so sure about her he learned to accept her, love her and found out she was really loving and caring too. In school Max would get bullied and made fun of for being weird or stupid he didn't care much about that sometimes they would hurt him physically to. But he had his family that would cheer him up and make him happy when he was down. School being rough he resorted to being anti-social. Getting a taste for different kinds of music and singers, he also started drawing which made him really happy. Soon he found friends that liked him for him and actually hung out with him. his life began to get better and better. He even started taking piano and drum lessons. Through the years he never got his cutie mark for some reason, he still got made fun of about that but he didn't care he knew his cutie mark would come soon besides he was to busy with music to care. He had the best teacher ever. His uncle and he would laugh with each other as he taught him to play step by step both piano and drums.

In his older adult years he finally got his cutie mark, piano keys with drum sticks crossing behind them. He also became a fairly popular drummer and pianoist being booked for different events around Equestria and even farther out he loved his life it was amazing. He than fell in love with a lovely mare she was so beautiful to him the way her mane flowed in the wind as her eyes shone with joy, his heart pounded everytime she was near him. He was shy and didn't really have the guts to ask her on a date or anything of the sorts when he finally worked up the guts he was to late she had found somepony else. His heart was shattered his music started to get more depressing and sad but he learned that she wasn't the one for him and there were plenty of others out there for him, so he went back to being happy and joyful though he now tries to never fall in love for the fear of another heart break.

Example RP segment:  
It was a month after the heart break and Max was still sad as ever so he decided to take a quick walk around ponyville as he was walking along a stranger came along and bumped into him max didn't care and just got up and kept walking as he continued to walk when he was stopped by a royal guard, the guard saying that he had a murder weapon on him and must come with him. Max not being in the mood for this motioned behind him "Your suspect is running away you know" he tossed the guard the weapon that was apparently placed on him and walked off not caring if the guard didn't believe him or not.

Acceptance

Looks good so far but you need more onto the personality

If he's an adult then shouldn't his cutiemark be there already? and you still need to make the personality at least a paragraph.

Quote :

Max will always be there for you and will be willing to help you in your time of need. He is also kind, loving and willing to fight for you if he had to. He is serious most of the time but other times he can be completely random. He likes adventuring and exploring which have made him very brave. His heart is made of iron ever since his last heart break and even if you try, you can't break him.

History: Maxulus has a great cheerful life with his loving and caring family which consisted of three brothers, a sister and a loving yet caring mom and dad. His mom and dad got divorced when he was three (More needs to be added onto here telling how he felt about the divorce). Soon after his dad found new love, Max wasn't so sure about her but he learned to accept her, love her, and found out that she was really loving and caring too. In school Max would get bullied and made fun of for being weird or stupid but he didn't care much about that even though sometimes, they would hurt him physically. Whenever he felt down his family would cheer him up and make him happy! With school being so rough, he resorted to being anti-social (Tell how he felt about being this way). Getting a taste for different kinds of music and singers, he also started drawing which made him really happy. Soon he found friends that liked him for him and actually hung out with him. Soon enough, his life began take a much more positive turn, and he even started taking piano and drum lessons. He had the best teacher ever to help guide him on his journey into the music world which was his uncle! They would laugh with each other as he taught him step by step, how to play both piano and drums which got him his cutie mark, piano keys with drum sticks crossing behind them.

He quickly became a fairly popular drummer and pianist while being booked for different events around Equestria. He absolutely loved his life, it was amazing! He then fell in love with a lovely mare who was so beautiful to him the way her mane flowed in the wind as her eyes shone with joy, his heart pounded everytime she was near him but he was shy, and didn't really have the guts to ask her on a date or anything of the sorts. He finally worked up the guts only to find that he was to late, she had found somepony else. His heart was shattered as his music started to get more depressing. Later he learned that she wasn't the one for him and there were plenty of others out there for him, so he went back to being happy and joyful although he now tries to forget about falling in love for the fear of another heart break.

Quote :

Example RP: It was a month after the heart break and Max was still as sad as ever so he decided to take a quick walk around Ponyville. As he was walking along the path, a stranger came along and bumped into him which knocked him over. Max didn't care about what had just happened, got up and kept walking. As he continued to walk, he was then stopped by a royal guard, the guard saying that he had a murder weapon on him and must come with him. Max, not being in the mood for this, motioned behind him "Your suspect is running away you know." He then tossed the guard the weapon that was apparently placed on him and walked off still not caring if the guard did or did not believe him.