TheNarrator
Posts : 11 Join date : 2013-11-19 Location : England, A.K.A: The Top Hat Place.
| Subject: Narration Line Wed Nov 20, 2013 1:49 pm | |
| Narration Line. INSERT CHARACTER IMAGE HERE: I will be relying on my writing skills for description. Gender: Male. Species: Unicorn. Mane: His mane is a dark blonde color, and is extremely messy, and barely gets cut, never mind being combed, the only noticeable feature would be the fact that he can still see through his forest of hair. Tail: His tail is just as messy as his mane, hair being frayed in all directions, and barely ever being cared for. Eyes: Has bright turquoise eyes, but are usually bloodshot from the amount of sleep he misses out on. Body: Narration Line is not the most fit of ponies, and as such, doesn't have much muscle. his coat is a dark grey color. Cutie Mark: His cutie mark is a ponies mouth, frozen in mid sentence. Age (Baby,adult): Adult, 20. Personality: Narrator is very talkative, and prefers the company of friends and family than being alone, however, his obsession with books and writing stories often leads him to having no energy, so in this state, he prefers to stay at home and recuperate over talking, so he can be a very confusing to talk to. He also is usually very busy, so he can also seem a bit rushed at times. Likes: Everything to to with any language, books, lazing about, conversing with friends, and music. Dislikes: Terrible grammar or punctuation, in both meanings, he also greatly dislikes being tired, and yet, often gets no sleep. History: Narration line was a very docile pony from birth, opting to hide under anything and everything possible, from social meetings, to friends parties, but as he grew older, this became less and less common, until he gave a public speech for his school, at which point he found his cutie mark, a specialty in telling stories and speeches. After that event, he decided that it would be a good idea to go from place to place, city to city, telling stories, and so he did. He travels far and wide to tell stories old and new, from the great city of Canterlot, to the town of Apploosa , and has finally decided to stop and relax for a while, to escape all the troubles of traveling, who knows? He might even stay!
Example RP segment: It is pouring rain outside. Your OC spots the light of a tavern up ahead. The tavern is filled with ponies that your OC doesn't know: Narration Line trudged through the oak door into the bustling tavern, and scanned the room looking for anyone he knew around he sighed, no one here that he knew. He wiped his eyes and shook his hair to get the rain off a bit, walked up to the counter and asked the pony at the stand. "Could I get a glass of water please?" the pony poured the water into a glass and brought it to Narration. "So, what brings you to this here tavern" said the barkeep groggily. Narrator gulped the water down quickly, after doing so, he responded to the barkeep. "I have been traveling for a few years, traveling around city to town, and I've finally decided to set up base in Ponyville, and I happened to find your tavern, and with all the rain, I decided that it would be wise to come here" the barkeep noodded and continued serving drinks to the other customers. Narration slowly fell asleep on the counter, thinking about his future stories, his new home and many other subjects of the matter... slowly drifting off to sleep... Only to be rudely awoken by the barkeep, and thrown out. "I HAVE to stop falling asleep like that" he mumbled to himself, as he carried on through the rain, on the way to Ponyville.
Hope this is detailed enough. -acceptance-
Last edited by TheNarrator on Wed Nov 20, 2013 6:58 pm; edited 2 times in total (Reason for editing : Needs improvement.) | |
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mcewanman
Posts : 833 Join date : 2013-02-23 Location : Rivera
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Wed Nov 20, 2013 2:16 pm | |
| Firstly, welcome to the site! I'm MC, one of the mods here. This app is going well but there are a couple of issues that need resolving before it's approvable. Basically, your RP segment, history and personality are far too short. Look in the sections for each race to get an idea of appropriate length.
Still a cool idea though. Looking to forward seeing how he develops. | |
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TheNarrator
Posts : 11 Join date : 2013-11-19 Location : England, A.K.A: The Top Hat Place.
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Wed Nov 20, 2013 4:28 pm | |
| Alright, I'll get on that right now. | |
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TheNarrator
Posts : 11 Join date : 2013-11-19 Location : England, A.K.A: The Top Hat Place.
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Wed Nov 20, 2013 7:22 pm | |
| Alright, I've done the editing, and did the whole, 'acceptance' thing. | |
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Rosey Bubbles
Posts : 489 Join date : 2013-02-26 Location : chillin in a palm tree on a gnarly wave shyah bruh
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Thu Nov 21, 2013 7:43 pm | |
| Omygosh. Narration Line and Sea Salt mustmustMUST meet once you get him approved.
They can be travel-y storytell-y buddies :33 | |
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TheNarrator
Posts : 11 Join date : 2013-11-19 Location : England, A.K.A: The Top Hat Place.
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Sun Nov 24, 2013 5:06 pm | |
| That must happen, Rosey Bubbles! | |
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mcewanman
Posts : 833 Join date : 2013-02-23 Location : Rivera
| Subject: Re: Narration Line Sun Nov 24, 2013 8:56 pm | |
| Still a touch thin, but it's lacking fluff I suppose and is to the point. I'll let it slide.
I PRONOUNCE THEE PONY AND OTHER PONY OF INTERMINABLE GENDER!!! Sorry? What? Oh. Wrong thing? Cheesy joke? Possibly delete this? Nah, wasting time is pretty much my only talent. That and not understanding nice thing people say about me.
Regardless, APPROVED!!! Come down to the chatbox whenever you fancy meeting the lovely poneighs here, though I'm sure you've already been there. Just a precaution. | |
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