Twillion
Posts : 6
Join date : 2012-06-05
 |  Subject: May Strider  Wed Jun 06, 2012 12:09 am | |
| May Strider Gender: Female Species: Pegasus Mane: Dark lime green, messy. Tail: Messy. Eyes: Light blue. Body: Small and kind of skinny, taller than a normal filly. Cutie Mark: Blank flank Age (Baby,adult): Filly Personality: She is persistent on finding her cutie mark, like the cutie mark crusaders. She is loyal, and cherishes her friends. She can stand up and talk, instead of hide and stay quiet. She likes to explore, especially in sweet apple acres ( If they let her look around, that is ) Likes: Lemonade, polka dots, stunts, pranks ( small ones. ), making people laugh. Dislikes: Yelling, seeing somepony get hurt and can't do anything about it, she has claustrophobia. History: Ever since she was a baby her mother and father have left to Cloudsdale and promised to come back soon, but never did, she was left with only her brother, named Prism Strider, to take care of her. They have been living in a cozy home in the streets of Ponyville, like most ponies. She likes to spend her time with her brother, and helps him sell citrus fruits, but most days she hangs out with her friends.
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Mriia
Posts : 346
Join date : 2011-11-22
Age : 35
Location : Manehatten Slum
| | Subject: Re: May Strider Wed Jun 06, 2012 1:49 am | |
| There are some little consistancy things such as:
"Ever since she was a baby her mother and father have left to Cloudsdale to take care of serious family business for 20 years"
Do her parents come back periodicly? or are they gone to cloudsdale indefenitly?
Does this mean she is a 20 year old filly? I think you might want to rethink the ageing. Also the Everfree Forest is a little bit off limits since ponys are suposted to stay away from it.
How about to drop in on the chat box at the bottom of the main page and some of the other members can help you out! | |
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Twillion
Posts : 6
Join date : 2012-06-05
| | Subject: Re: May Strider Wed Jun 06, 2012 5:18 pm | |
| Thanks, I don't think I was really thinking it through . I edited it, and I think it should be fine now. :) | |
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Indigo Surprise
Posts : 996
Join date : 2011-11-21
Age : 32
Location : Ponyville
| | Subject: Re: May Strider Wed Jun 06, 2012 7:32 pm | |
| Well I don't see any harm (RP wise) with an adventurous foal adventuring near the forest. After all the CMCs did to search for a chicken. | |
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Mriia
Posts : 346
Join date : 2011-11-22
Age : 35
Location : Manehatten Slum
| | Subject: Re: May Strider Thu Jun 07, 2012 12:41 am | |
| Indi does make a good, point. I see no further problems with this app so I will Approve it.
Happy RPing! | |
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