Cranium The Scientist ( fixed)

Gender: Male
Species: Unicorn
Mane:short,light blue and white, typically neatly combed, pretty straight, he doesn't have a specific style
Tail: same colors
Eyes: blue
Body: grey, a little more slender than the average stallion, he typically wears a lab coat, he also wears rectangular glasses
Cutie Mark: a microscope
Age (Baby,adult): 23

Personality: Cranium's way of thinking is very logical, and he refuses to believe something unless there is scientific proof to prove it. He can be extremely stubborn, and often looks down on anypony he finds inferior, excluding his little brother, he's rather cold and is usually pretty rude,even if he doesn't realize it, and Cranium has a very over inflated ego, though he will usually be nice enough to anyone who he thinks has a high position in society.

Likes: science lectures, education, romance novels(he insists he hates them, but of course he's lying), lab coats, his little brother, Rusty

Dislikes: animals,country singers and rappers, over excitable ponies,cupcakes, anypony who tries to hug him, flashy outfits, his mother, parties, Nightmare Night, Hearts and Hooves Day, most holidays in general ( he thinks most of them have no point)

History: When Cranium was a colt, he was the first one in his class to get his cutie mark. He when his mother gave him a microscope for his birthday, and he was so intrigued by it, that he decided to figure out how it worked, then give a speech on how it works to his class. They were bored out of their minds, but he had great fun explaining it, and when he looked at his flank later,he noticed a small microscope, his cutie mark. His little brother was always living in his shadow, and was barely paid attention to, unless Cranium wanted him to fetch something for him. Cranium was adored by his mother, who often showcased him to her friends at parties. One day Rusty was sent to live with Cranium after he was old enough to live on his own, as his mother was going away on business for a few months, and Rusty needed someone to look after him. Cranium could care less for his family, but he surprised himself when he actually grew fond for his little brother, who is still a school age colt. Cranium is often very protective of his little brother, and he finds he feels rather guilty of the way he treated Rusty when he was younger. Now, they both reside in Ponyville.


A secret admirer confesses his/her love to your OC. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.

Cranium's eyes drifted throughout the market place, when they finally settled on what he was looking for. It was very quiant here in Ponyville, and he much prefered Canterlot's high society atmosphere to these little peasant ponies. Hmm... those apples should prove to be what I need... he thought to himself. He walked over to the mare, hauling a cart of apples. She stared at him a moment, with some kind of dreamy, moony expression, then giggled girlishly.
" Can I help you?" she asked with a grin.
Cranium gave the mare an odd look.
" Yes, I need an apple," he said carefully, slightly disturbed by the way the mare was looking at her.
" I love you," she whispered. Cranium cocked his head. " What was that?" said the stallion. " Uh, nothing... an apple is 3 bits, but I can make an exception..." she said, winking at him, leaning closer to him. Cranium stared at the mare. He didn't know what to think of this mare, but her displays of... affection, or whatever she was doing was creeping him out. He could buy apples somewhere else.
" CALL ME!" yelled the lovesick mare after him. Cranium shook his head as he quickly trotted away, and decided to call it a day.
" The ponies in this town are crazy..." he muttered to himself, before slamming the door shut to his house, so he could finally have some time alone, unless Rusty was blaring his stupid rock music again.

Acceptance

Your OC is looking good. You just need to make a few adjustments before it can be approved.

Either add a picture of Cranium, or add plenty of detail to the physical descriptions (mane, tail, eyes, body)

Use paragraphing to avoid walls of text, partially in your roleplaying segment when speech is involved.

Also, just look out for grammar mistakes, like spaces and missing capital letters.

Fireseeker wrote:

Your OC is looking good. You just need to make a few adjustments before it can be approved.

Either add a picture of Cranium, or add plenty of detail to the physical descriptions (mane, tail, eyes, body)

Use paragraphing to avoid walls of text, partially in your roleplaying segment when speech is involved.

Also, just look out for grammar mistakes, like spaces and missing capital letters.

Argh, yes you're totally right, sorry about that! I thought I added enough extra bits about him but now that I look at it, it does need more. I'm sorry, my computer just won't let me upload pics.

I'd be more than happy to draw you a picture, if you want. Then, I can send it to one of the admins, and they can put it in for you.

Calla Lily wrote:

I'd be more than happy to draw you a picture, if you want. Then, I can send it to one of the admins, and they can put it in for you.

Oh my gosh, yes that would be awesome! Thanks so much, your a lifesaver! By the way Fireseeker, I edited the paragraph issues a little bit, but it still might be kind of screwy.

Significant changes made. Your character has been approved.

Adding a picture would still be great though :)